Weekend Writing Warriors – Work in Progress

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Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors where we share 8 sentences of our writing, published or unpublished for your viewing pleasure and critique. Remember to click the button above to visit other weekend writing warriors. The following 8 comes from my latest work in progress. Vampire Layla is awake after sleeping 2,000 years and I’d love to hear your thoughts.

 

“Who are you?” Nubiti, the golden lady began to kick and scratch at Layla’s hands.

“Doo…not…fee-arrh…meee…” Her vocal cords stilted the strange words even to her ears, with a rasping halt that sounded too deep to be human. 

When Nubiti screamed and kicked her in the face, the spiked heel of her sandal lodged in Layla’s eye.

“Nubiti…” The low rumble Layla emitted was meant to sooth but she could not temper the power behind it. Unable to find calming words, she shook her head as the woman’s eyes rolled.  Nubiti was keening now, hysterical in fear.

Layla crawled over the woman, rubbing the dark, glittering stones on her garment, like stars in the night, which left most of her body bare. The golden lady looked into the eye she’d ruptured with her shoe, her own blue eyes widening as the fissure closed. 

 

 

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I should have known I would end up here... Give me a good book and I'm in heaven. Especially romance, mystery, mayhem, the fantastic and the fey. Give me a laptop and I'm writing any one of these, and not in any particular order.

14 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors – Work in Progress”

  1. It’s very intriguing, but I’m a bit confused as to which one is asking “Who are you?” since both are in the line after. And the next line I’m assuming is Layla, but it might clarify it more by saying “Layla’s vocal cords….” I had to read it a couple times. Of course it could be because I’m just jumping in on a snippet, and it’s probably clearer in the full scene, so feel free to ignore me totally. 🙂 It certainly makes me want to keep reading see what happens next!
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